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diff --git a/_ont/ont-huawei-ma5671a-root.md b/_ont/ont-huawei-ma5671a-root.md
index 0fbf987..7e01b25 100644
--- a/_ont/ont-huawei-ma5671a-root.md
+++ b/_ont/ont-huawei-ma5671a-root.md
@@ -134,9 +134,9 @@ sed -i  "s|/opt/lantiq/bin/minishell|/bin/ash|g" /etc/passwd
 {% include alert.html content="The cause of these kernel panics could be insufficient supply of power." alert="Info" icon="svg-info" color="blue" %}
 
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-1. After this is done, reboot the stick, after connecting it to the router via an ethernet mediaconverter or directly plug it in an SFP port, with the port's IP set to whatever IP of the 192.168.1.0/24 subnet (the stick has the IP 192.168.1.10)
+After this is done, reboot the stick, after connecting it to a router via an ethernet mediaconverter or directly plugging it in an SFP port, with the port's IP set to any IP of the `192.168.1.0/24` subnet (the stick has the IP `192.168.1.10`)
 
-{% include alert.html content="If your subnet is 192.168.1.0/24 make sure you have no ip conflicts." alert="Note" icon="svg-warning" color="yellow" %}
+{% include alert.html content="If your LAN subnet is `192.168.1.0/24` make sure you have no ip conflicts." alert="Note" icon="svg-warning" color="yellow" %}
 
 {% include alert.html content="On some SFP host devices you might not be able to connect to the stick if there's no optical signal (RX loss), in that case you need to connect the fiber to make changes on the stick" alert="Note" icon="svg-warning" color="yellow" %}
 
@@ -157,7 +157,7 @@ The password is `admin123`.
 
 {% include alert.html content="This procedure requires the physical disassembly of the stick, and the use of tweezers that can burn the stick, it is highly recommended not to use it." alert="Important" icon="svg-warning" color="red" %}
 
-1. take the SFP molex and the 4 coloured cables and solder them to the molex according to the following diagram:
+1. Take the SFP molex and the 4 coloured cables and solder them to the molex according to the following diagram:
 
 | USB TTL (UART) Adapter | wire colour in picture | SFP 20pins Molex connector |
 | ---------------------- | ---------------------- | -------------------------- |
@@ -177,14 +177,14 @@ The password is `admin123`.
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-4.jpg" alt="Metal tabs that hold the cover in place" caption="Metal tabs that hold the cover in place" %}
 
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-1. Once you have removed the metal casing, you are left with the half-naked stick (note that the release mechanism also comes off easily and then you don't know how to put it back together, so take a photo and memorise the positioning well).
+1. Once you have removed the metal casing, you are left with the half-naked stick. Note that the release mechanism also comes off easily, so it is recommended to take a photo and to memorise the positioning to be able to put it back together in the case it does come off.
 
-1. Before shorting the stick, connect the previously soldered cables and molex to the USB serial (photo immediately below) and to the stick (the molex, of course) and check that the jumper on the usb key is set to 3.3V
+1. Before shorting the stick, connect the previously soldered cables and molex to the USB serial (photo immediately below) and to the stick (via the molex, of course) and check that the jumper on the usb key is set to 3.3V
 
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-8.jpg" alt="TTL" caption="TTL" %}
 
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-1. The disassembled stick will appear as in the photo, in which I have highlighted in red the 2 pins to be shorted. Here they use wire, but a pair of tweezers is sufficient (I used those, in fact). Be careful not to make any other contacts by possibly covering everything else with electrical tape.
+1. The disassembled stick will appear as in the photo: the two pins to be shorted are highlighted in red. In the photo below a wire is used, but a pair of tweezers is sufficient (I used those, in fact). Be careful not to touch anything around the two pins by possibly covering everything else with electrical tape.
 
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-4.jpg" alt="tweezers" caption="tweezers" %}
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-6.jpg" alt="tweezers" caption="tweezers" %}
@@ -192,9 +192,10 @@ The password is `admin123`.
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-6.jpg" alt="tweezers" caption="tweezers" %}
 
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-1. For the moment connect all cables to the usb key except the green (ground) or red (voltage), otherwise the stick will boot before you can do the following (N.B. for those who bought the uart above RX and TX are reversed). Open and configure Teratem for serial connection (select the correct com port, speed 115.200, english language, otherwise in japainise you can't read anything understandable) insert the key in the PC (I take it for granted that it has already been installed, drivers and all), short the 2 pins seen above and keeping the short connected the missing coloured cable
+1. For the moment connect all cables to the usb key except the green (ground) or red (voltage), otherwise the stick will boot before you can do the following (N.B. for those who bought the uart above RX and TX are reversed). Open and configure Tera Term for serial connection  by selecting the correct com port, speed 115200 bauds, english language (otherwise in japanese you can't read anything understandable), then insert the key in the PC (the adapter being already installed is taken for granted), short the 2 pins seen above and, while keeping the pins shorted, connect the missing coloured cable
 
-1. If you have done everything correctly, you should see something similar to the picture below (if nothing happens, you have obviously done something wrong with cables, molexes, soldering irons, etc., so you will have to start from the beginning again and work out which step you did wrong):
+1. If nothing happens, you have obviously done something wrong with cables, molexes, soldering irons, etc., so you will have to start from the beginning again and work out which step you did wrong. 
+If you have done everything correctly, you should see something similar to the picture below:
 
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-9.png" alt="serial shell" caption="serial shell" %}
 
@@ -204,12 +205,12 @@ The password is `admin123`.
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-10.png" alt="serial shell 2" caption="serial shell 2" %}
 
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-1. From the Teraterm menu `FILE` → `TRANSFER` → `XMODEM` → `SEND` → `[1224abort.bin]` (which is the third of the files downloaded earlier):
+1. From the Tera Term menu `FILE` → `TRANSFER` → `XMODEM` → `SEND` → `[1224abort.bin]` (which is the third of the files downloaded earlier):
 
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-11.png" alt="1224abort.bin" caption="1224abort.bin" %}
 
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-1. As soon as the file transfer is complete, you have 2 seconds to press `CTRL+C`, if you have not done so, you can return to the step 6. Otherwise, you should see:
+1. As soon as the file transfer is complete, you have 2 seconds to press `CTRL+C`. If you have not done so, return to step 6. Otherwise, you should see:
 
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-12.png" alt="falcon shell" caption="falcon shell" %}
 
@@ -224,10 +225,10 @@ FALCON => saveenv
 
 {% include alert.html content="Originally, this other string was used for the `setenv preboot`: `gpio input 105;gpio input 106;gpio input 107;gpio input 108;gpio set 3;gpio set 109;gpio set 110;gpio clear 423;gpio clear 422;gpio clear 325;gpio clear 402;gpio clear 424`" alert="Info" icon="svg-info" color="blue" %}
 
-{% include alert.html content="Instead of the nexts points, it is recommended to boot and run the `sed` command documented in V2" alert="Warning" icon="svg-warning" color="red" %}
+{% include alert.html content="Instead of taking the next steps, it is recommended to boot and run the `sed` command documented in V2" alert="Warning" icon="svg-warning" color="red" %}
 
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-1. If you have done everything correctly you can reboot the stick (actually if you are convinced that everything is ok you could also close it again), disconnecting and reconnecting one of the 2 cables from before (ground or voltage), then again from the terminal you will have 5 seconds to lock the bootloader by doing a simple CTRL+C. Now upload the firmware image of the first mtd2 partition to the stick with the command
+1. If you have done everything correctly you can reboot the stick (if you are convinced that everything is ok you could also close it again), disconnect and reconnect either the ground or voltage cable, then again you will have 5 seconds to lock the bootloader by doing a simple CTRL+C using the terminal. Now upload the firmware image of the first mtd2 partition to the stick with the command
 ```
 FALCON => loadb 0x80800000
 ```
@@ -236,8 +237,8 @@ At this point it will appear:
 {% include image.html file="ma5671a-root-13.jpg" alt="shell requiring `mtd2` upload" caption="shell requiring `mtd2` upload" %}
 
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-1. From the teratem menu do `FILE` → `TRANSFER` → `KERMIT` → `SEND` → `[mtd2.bin]`.
-It will start uploading the file at a speed of about 3-4 KBps. Now you will have to wait more than half an hour for the upload to complete.
+1. From the Tera Term menu do `FILE` → `TRANSFER` → `KERMIT` → `SEND` → `[mtd2.bin]`.
+It will start uploading the file at a speed of about 3-4 KBps: it should take more than half an hour for the upload to complete.
 
 1. Once finished, the image loaded on the stick must also be saved to the corresponding system partition (the first of the 2) with the commands
 ```
@@ -246,11 +247,11 @@ FALCON => sf erase C0000 740000
 FALCON => sf write 80800000 C0000 740000
 ```
 
-1. check that the stick is configured to boot from partition 0 (yes I know mtd2 goes on 0 and mtd5 goes on 1, complain to Laniq) with the command
+1. Check that the stick is configured to boot from partition 0 (We are aware that mtd2 goes on 0 and mtd5 goes on 1, complain to Lantiq about this) with the command:
 ```
 FALCON => printenv committed_image
 ```
-1. If it is 0, fine, otherwise configure partition 0 with the commands, and check if are 0.
+1. If it is 0 there's no need to do anything, otherwise configure the stick to boot from partition 0 with the following commands, then check if the settings were changed correctly.
 ```
 FALCON => setenv committed_image 0
 FALCON => saveenv